OPINION ESSAY
Mobile phone
Nowadays, technology is more and more developed highly. There are a great number of devices invented and produced to bring considerable benefits in people's lives in all fields. One of common devices is mobile phone. Actually, it is a very necessary and useful invention.
It is very useful because it has many functions. In busy life, people usually go far away from home to work or study. Therefore, cell phone becomes a bridge to connect between us with our family, even in a very,very long distance by making a phone call or sending text messages. In the old days, when we wanted to keep in touch with someone, we must write letters or use telegram. This certainly took us lots of time. But now with a mobile phone, contacting is getting easier and quicker. In addition, cell phone also has other entertaining functions to make people relaxed. For example, we can listen to music, play games or chat to each other. We also can activate our phone's camera to take photos if we like. Moreover, with the cellphone we can access the Internet to search information we need in anywhere and anytime. Also, we can use the dictionary on the cellphone to check and look up words conveniently.
Even with all these benefits, some people say that using the mobile phone wastes a lot of time and money, because people spend many hours chatting on the phone; and it could be harmful to our health. However, if they consider what mobile phone's benefits could bring and supposing if there are not any cellphones, how people can contact with each other, especially in emergency situation, they would see the importance of cellphone. If we want to use cellphone effectively and safely, we can control, limit the time we talk on mobile phone and use a "hand-free" device to keep the mobile phone away from head and body.
Mobile phone is becoming a more and more popular telecommunications service in the world. There are a variety prices of cellphones, so people can choose suitable ones easier. Indeed, mobile phone has a lot of advantages and conveniences. In the future, perhaps there will be smaller, lighter and more stylish cellphones designed with another useful functions.
27 thg 11, 2009
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